Commentary
Dear Joshua
I really enjoyed navigating through your electronic portfolio. The short video clips are very funny and compliment your themes throughout the years. I cannot believe you are about to graduate from high school. I am very proud of all your accomplishments during the past four years and in particular your growth as a writer. My favorite piece is, “Shades of Cat.” When I read the first paragraph, I must admit, I was a little shocked, but soon realized you were talking about our fat cat Mama Sween. My favorite line is, “Fat dangling from her sides swaying back in forth in the air like a pendulum.” That exactly describes Mama Sween as she walks across the floor. Your paper entitled, “Technology” needs a little work. There were several grammatical and spelling errors. I am one to talk, I’m sure this letter also has many mistakes. I believe your writing has improved in two major ways. First, the use of transition sentences makes your papers flow better. Next, I know you prefer research type papers; however I think you have grown into a very witty and creative writer. I know your first love is math and science, but it is my hope you will continue writing and letting your creative juices flow.
Love,
Mom
I really enjoyed navigating through your electronic portfolio. The short video clips are very funny and compliment your themes throughout the years. I cannot believe you are about to graduate from high school. I am very proud of all your accomplishments during the past four years and in particular your growth as a writer. My favorite piece is, “Shades of Cat.” When I read the first paragraph, I must admit, I was a little shocked, but soon realized you were talking about our fat cat Mama Sween. My favorite line is, “Fat dangling from her sides swaying back in forth in the air like a pendulum.” That exactly describes Mama Sween as she walks across the floor. Your paper entitled, “Technology” needs a little work. There were several grammatical and spelling errors. I am one to talk, I’m sure this letter also has many mistakes. I believe your writing has improved in two major ways. First, the use of transition sentences makes your papers flow better. Next, I know you prefer research type papers; however I think you have grown into a very witty and creative writer. I know your first love is math and science, but it is my hope you will continue writing and letting your creative juices flow.
Love,
Mom